Scarred Love Lost

“Can I talk to him?”

“No… Do not call this house again.” Click.

Carrie felt her face flush, red shame heating her whole body.

What was she doing there? He said she moved out, separated.

A year of empty promises, time and life wasted. Idealistic dreams of what could be, shattered by twenty years of marriage to be worked on. 

How could I have been so stupid? He was never going to pick me.

A rude awakening. A reason, finally time to leave and move on. Young, “in love,” easily manipulated. A phase, but one that would leave scars.

This blog post is part of Charli Mill’s Flash Fiction Challenge issued by Carrot Ranch Communications. July 22, 2015 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that has a shift in perspective. It can be a transition of one character or a change between character points of view. Go where the prompt leads, either technically or creatively.


8 thoughts on “Scarred Love Lost

  1. It’s never easy being the two women in one man’s life and interesting how he doesn’t seem to be the one scarred. Scar-giver. But eventually, hopefully, the woman on each side come to a better conclusion than him! Good emotion written into your flash, too!

    1. Thank you! This was a fun one. I love taking observations or experiences and twisting them into fiction, manipulating the story to fit the theme/prompt/etc. Easily my favorite type of writing. I Really want to expand on this “scene” further and write it as an experience of one of my characters. 🙂

  2. It must be extremely difficult to be the ‘other woman’ in a relationship. How many women hang on, with umpteen promises of a life together soon… a ‘soon’ that never comes? False promises, false hope – which you’ve shown really well in your lovely, poignant poem. 🙂

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