Serenity of Silence


Crisp, early morning breeze played with her tangled, unruly wisps. She slipped out without disturbing him; still sleeping in the cabin, rest a part of his ideal vacation. This was her time, the serenity of silence the rejuvenation her soul had been crying for. 

Frigid sapphire glistened and lapped around her chilled ankles, shins, thighs. Inch by inch, slowly lowering herself into the depths, moving further from the craggy shoreline. Weightless under, surrounded by the clear cocoon of nothingness.

Dawn sunlight cast shimmering glows across her buoyant limbs. Floating on the surface, the peace, the stillness was her heaven.

This blog post is part of Charli Mill’s Flash Fiction Challenge issued by Carrot Ranch Communications. May 27th prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story, using the above photo as a prompt. You can make it a garden party or an international spy thriller. Who is there and why? Does the backdrop scenery make an impact or is it ignored? The place is on an island, if you wish to make use of that. Go where the photograph leads you this week.



33 thoughts on “Serenity of Silence

    1. Thank you! I saw that prompt and thought “Dang, I want to be on vacation and submerge myself in that lake!” Funny thing is, we stopped by this lake in Northern Idaho (Lake Pond Orielle) on our way to our honeymoon in Canada, so part of this was reflective of that as well 🙂

  1. Welcome to Charli’s ranch: it’s great place to exercise those flash muscles. Charli’s a generous and amusing host and the other buckaroos are a welcoming bunch too. Lovely flash and some stunning imagery.

    1. Thanks!! This was one of the most recommended blogging/prompt challenges in that “blog prompt suggestions” post I wrote a while back, and was certainly one of the ones that intrigued me the most. Looking forward to being a regular participant. I love the challenge of writing a great piece with few words. Flash is new to me and pushes me outside my “wordy” comfort zone 🙂

      1. Welcome to the ranch from me also. It is a great place to be. Flash really hones your skill as a writer I think. Being able to get a story across in few words makes you remove all those unnecessary adjectives and adverbs and ensures you write actively as it takes less words. We are probably all outside our comfort one but the ranch is a safe place to be and the prompts are thought provoking to say the least.

      2. It is a great way to push outside those comfort zones! I really enjoyed this week and can’t wait to participate in more weekly challenges and meet other writers through this! 🙂

  2. Absolutely beautiful imagery. The descriptions of the water, and the way it caresses her body, is truly evocative. By the last couple of sentences, i was floating with her. 🙂

    1. Thank you so much for recommending this prompt challenge! I’ve been crazy busy the past month, but am finally ready to participate on a regular basis. Loved this flash fiction challenge and can’t wait to write more! 🙂

  3. That is my idea of serenity, too! And that water is always cool in a good way. The details are vivid, bringing the prompt to life. Thanks for joining us at Carrot Ranch!

  4. Lovely flash. I know well that difference in partner sleeping patterns and the sneaking out to do your own thing whilst the significant other sleeps on. And what better way to spend that time than a swim in the lake. Loved your description particularly “clear cocoon of nothingness.”

      1. I think you would have many that could relate to this. I disturb my husband’s sleep at both ends as I stay up reading to past midnight and then am up at 4 am (in summer). Winter he loves where I am sad at the 3-4 hours working time I lose each day. Come back summer.

  5. I feel like this photo and your description of slipping into the water was taken directly out of a chapter of my life.

    Our executive team would head into cottage country in June for a strategy retreat. The photo with the stairs navigating the rocks to the water describes several of the locations we stayed at over the years.

    We would spend long days in meetings, presentations, and discussions but early morning was ‘my time’ when I would wake early and slip out for a quiet (very cold) swim.

    Thank you – your post triggered that very strong memory

    1. I’m so glad you could relate!! 🙂 My husband and I have polar opposite sleep schedules, even if I stay up with him (he is a night owl) I usually can’t sleep in late with him. That is my “me” time and I absolutely love it ❤

    1. Thank you so much, Michelle! As the title of my blog suggests, I tend to be “wordy,” so this challenge was really great in forcing me to do just that, be as descriptive and elicit as much feeling as possible in a set number of words. Really enjoyed this!! 😀

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